IELTS Writing Correction Service /
Writing Samples /
Band 5.5

Topic: you have just read an article in an international travel magazine which contained some information about your town that is incorrect.

#topic #article #travel #magazine #information #town
Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing
this
 letter regarding the
article
 which had published in your magazine
last
 Sunday. There was an
article
 about my home town Hue City.
However
, I read the said
article
 and I would like to mention, that there were some mismatches and irrelevant information were there.
Firstly
, I found that you have written my city does not contain any kind of historically important places. Even though you have written about the botanical garden unfortunately the
article
 failed to mention the importance of it.
On the other hand
, your magazine is one of the world-famous tourist magazines and all tourists are planning their trips based on the information which provides by themselves.
Therefore
, I would like to request you correct the mistake which was made by the writer.
Besides
 that, I am looking forward to offering a free visit from my end. During the visit, I can show essential historical places and necessary guidelines. Sincerely,
Submitted by quynhtranhbh on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Task Achievement
To further enhance your letter, aim to provide more specific examples or evidence to support your claims regarding the inaccuracies about your hometown. This will make your argument more persuasive and comprehensive.
Coherence & Cohesion
Consider varying your sentence structures and incorporating more cohesive devices to improve the flow and coherence of your writing. While the structure is clear, more sophisticated use of language could elevate the cohesion of the essay.
Logical Structure
Your letter is well-structured, clearly introducing the issue, providing details about the inaccuracies, and suggesting a constructive solution.
Complete Response
Your response directly addresses the task by specifying the inaccuracies and offering to correct them, which is an excellent application of the task demands.
Introduction/Conclusion Present
The concluding paragraph effectively wraps up your letter, reinforcing your offer to help and your desire for the magazine to correct the inaccuracies.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: