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the diagram below shows the stages in the life cycle of a dragonfly. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features1 and make comparisons where relevant.

the diagram below shows the stages in the life cycle of a dragonfly. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features1 and make comparisons where relevant.
The Diagram presents the growth p of
dragonfly
Correct article usage
a dragonfly
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 from the beginning to the end of the
life
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 cycle
Life
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 begins as a small egg which is laid under the water in the summer.
After one
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One
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 week later, each egg hatches and
immature
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an immature
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 insect or nymph appears in the fall.
Then
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, it eats and grows under the water in the winter. When the spring
come
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comes
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, the nymph leaves the water and
climb
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climbs
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 up a plant,
then
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, it molts.
Finally
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, it is
a
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an
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 adult dragonfly. During the summer, the adult
spend
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spends
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 its
life
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flies
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flying
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 in the air,
hunts
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hunting
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,
eats
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eating
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 insects and reproducing, beginning the
life
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 cycle once again. It lives like
this
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 for a few weeks or months and soon after its
life
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 is over. It takes one year to complete the
life
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 cycle of
dragonfly
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a dragonfly
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words life with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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