You are planning a holiday to Australia. You have been given the name and address of a hotel in the centre of Sydney and would like further information. Write a letter to the hotel. Ask about the availability of the rooms and the hotel's facilities. Find out if the hotel arranges day trips and ask them to send you a brochure.
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Dear Sir/Madam,
I am writing
this
message to you in order to find further
information Change preposition
about
of
your beautiful hotel.
I was informed by my colleague who was one of your guests Change preposition
about
that
stayed with you Correct pronoun usage
who
last
week.
I have heard about good reviews and planned to visiting
you on my special occasion.
I am planning to stay with you on 31 June Change the verb form
visit
this
year which is on
my birthday, Change preposition
apply
hence
, I implore you to provide me the
room availability Add the preposition
with the
as well as
the room cost on that day
for one person inclusive
breakfast and spa. Replace the word
including
Additionally
, in order to celebrating
my special occasion, I was Change the verb
celebrate
also
thinking about spending this
day
to do a one
Add a hyphen
one-day
day
trip to the centre of the
Sydney and visiting the beautiful city, to arrange Correct article usage
apply
this
special day
, kindly send me a brochure of this
trip package and I really learnt about it.
Thank you for your attention and I am really looking forward to hearing from you soon to make this
wonderful day
memorable.
Sincerely yours
NipeaceneSubmitted by NIPEACENE on
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Positive Feedback
It's delightful to see the personal touch you've added by mentioning your birthday and the special occasion. This adds a unique flair to your letter and makes your request more memorable.
Improvement Suggestion
Consider rephrasing to correct small inaccuracies for clarity, such as 'message' to 'letter' and addressing specific details like 'the room cost on that day for one person inclusive breakfast and spa' more succinctly. This will enhance readability and ensure your intentions are clearly understood.
Improvement Suggestion
For better coherence, organizing your requests more clearly in separate paragraphs could enhance the readability of your letter. Each major request (room availability, facilities, day trips, and brochure) could be its own paragraph.
Positive Feedback
The greeting and closing of your letter are polite and appropriate, setting a respectful tone for your interaction with the hotel.
Tone & Engagement
The personal touch of mentioning it's for a special occasion adds a nice flair.
Task Achievement
Your letter addresses all the requested information (room availability, facilities, arranging day trips, and requesting a brochure), showing good attention to task requirements.