The three pie charts illustrate how many hours in a British university library are spent by undergraduates and postgraduates compared to other students.

The three pie charts illustrate how many hours  in a British university library  are spent by undergraduates and postgraduates compared to other students.
The pie charts show the percentage of the
hours
that
pupil
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from three different groups have spent in the library of a British university.
Overall
, the ratio of individuals spending time less than
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of the day is reported to be high in the group of undergraduates
as well as
all students. First and foremost, in each
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the majority of people attending
library
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the library
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is vary
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.
The
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51% of postgraduates have been in that location for more
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15
houre
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hours
hour
of their days.
Moreover
, there are a vast number of
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undergraduates who take
thier
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their
time less
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7
hours
as well as
all the educators. In
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addition
, there is a slight difference in the
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of
three
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diagrams which are dedicated to
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study hours
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hours
between 8 and 14
hours
. To clarify, the
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of undergraduates and postgraduates consecutively
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28% and 32%. With regard to the same segment's issue, 35% of all people in
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have been occupied in the library
from
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8 to 14
hours
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "as well as".
Vocabulary: Replace the words hours with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Trends
  • Significant figures
  • Distribution
  • Comparison
  • Study habits
  • Preferences
  • Distance learners
  • Continuing education
  • Course requirements
  • Research needs
  • Resource allocation
  • Implications
  • Undergraduates
  • Postgraduates
  • Analyzing
  • Highlighting
  • Examining
  • Reviewing
  • Drawing comparisons
  • Summarizing
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