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While travelling by metro train, your credit card slipped out of your pocket. You realized this only after reaching home. Write a letter to the concerned authorities and explain what happened.

#metro #train #credit #card #pocket #home #authorities
Dear sir, I am a normal citizen,today I
must
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went
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 to my office and I decided to go by metro,So when I came back
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home about 5 pm, I realized that I lost my credit card and I
dont
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don't
 know exactly where.I really need that because I do all of my
works
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 with that and I am really
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nervous
 about it.
absolotly
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absolutely
 I searched
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 near my home recently but I
couldnt
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couldn't
found
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 that. I look
foward
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forward
 to your answer and give it back to me.
your
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 faithfully, Sogand Bagheri
Submitted by mayaghini on

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organization
Try to structure your letter more clearly with separate paragraphs for the introduction, details of what happened, and your request for assistance. This will enhance clarity and flow.
language use
Use varied sentence structures and more precise vocabulary to express your thoughts more effectively.
accuracy
Ensure to proofread your letter for any grammatical errors or typos to maintain professionalism.
detailing
It might be helpful to include more detailed information, like the date and time when you believe the loss occurred, or any specific location (if any) within the metro where you think you might have lost the card, to assist with the investigation.
purpose clarity
You clearly stated the purpose of your letter at the beginning, which is good for task achievement.
tone
Your polite tone throughout the letter is appropriate for the context.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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