The bar chart below illustrates five different industries’ percentage share of Brazil’s economy in 2009 and 2019 with a forecast for 2029. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The bar chart provides key information about Brazil's

economy

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ratio in

Finance

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, Food processing, Manufacturing, Tourism and Oil, coal and gas in the years 2009 to 2019 and 2029.

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, it is clear from the graph that

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represents a significant portion of industries.

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, tourism and oil, coal and gas showed modest percentages throughout the period.

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, Food processing and manufacturing showed insignificant portions.

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what is shown, In 2009 Brazil's economy related

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Finance

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as well as

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the percent accounted for around 32%.

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in the next 10 years

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about 38%. Food processing showed a minor ratio, almost 10%.

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, the percentages doubled in 2019. Manufacturing showed a fluctuation from 22% to 16%. Tourism and Fossil fuels

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represented

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an equivalent proportion in 2009 with a growth in ratio for Fossil fuels in 2019

about

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31%. in terms of Brazil's industries in 2029. The growth rate of the

finance

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sector was substantial

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at 42

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%. fossil fuels account for 26 per cent.

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other industries showed modesty between 5 to 10 per cent.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

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Single idea per paragraph

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

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Grammatical Range: 5.0

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175 words

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