Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Accept
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Accepting
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bad
situation
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situations
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could be the door
for
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to
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new
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a new
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opportunity
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opportunities
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of
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to
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live
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life
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. Several
of
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apply
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humans think that it is better to
accepting
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accept
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bad
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the bad
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situation
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situations
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, like working in the wrong uncomfortable place, lack of
money
and low
incom
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income
.
Other
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Others
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discuss that it is much better to
improving
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improve
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and
developing
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develop
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their
conditions
.
Although
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However
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, accepting bad
situation
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situations
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could help to
saving
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save
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some
money
which can enhance
thire self
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their
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and keep people
to stay
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apply
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away from
stress
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the stress
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of their
conditions
. You can stay familiar with your
conditions
which
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and
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you can not put
your self
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yourself
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under pressure, even
your
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if your
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work
is unsatisfactory or low
incom
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income
job.
This
is
low
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a low
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salary much better than nothing
while
you can save some cash to study or get some courses to improve your skills,
also
this
work
will give you a good experience and may add good value
in
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to
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your CV.
Also
,If they
didn'
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don't
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t
work
they will have
alot
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a lot
of free time and will be
under
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apply
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over thinking
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overthinking
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,
that
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which
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will drive them to bad mental health.
For example
, In the United Kingdom,
the
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apply
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overseas
dentist
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dentists
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can'
t
working
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work
be working
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in
there
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their
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field before doing (
ORE
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the ORE
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) Overseas Exam which
one
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is one
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of the requirements
the
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for the
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General Dental Council to start working.
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exam is too expensive so
alot
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a lot
of dentists
start
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have started
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working any
thing
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anything
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as
a
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apply
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security or reception in
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a clinic
the clinic
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clinic
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clinics
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or any place even with low
incom
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income
or unpleased
place
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places
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to
trying
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try
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to collect
money
to
join
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attend
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this
exam.
Therefore
, It is a good step to start their journey and keep
cliam
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close
to
thire
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their
there
goal. The people who say that the best to try to improve and develop
there
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their
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skill
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skills
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and don'
t
accept any chance even was low income or uncomfortable
work
. If
the
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apply
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people have
money
to
enhancing
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enhance
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their
conditions
, intuitively they
will not accept nothing
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will not accept anything
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and they will be able to development their self.
Such
as
,
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apply
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alot
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a lot
of students prefer
come
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to come
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to the UK
studying
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to study
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and
improving
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improve
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their English language and
join
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joining
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the
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a
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university.
Thus
, if you
need
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need to
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improve your
skill
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skills
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and satisfaction, you need to have a facility for that which is
money
,
healthy
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health
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and environment. In conclusion, accepting
bad
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a bad
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situation
might be
good
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a good
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way to start and don'
t
put yourself under stress.
While you
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You
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can improve
conditions
when you have a good facility. In my opinion, I believe that you should start any job can be open new field to you. So, you don'
t
stop and wait
the
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for the
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chance to start. You have to do anything to reach your aim.
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Language
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Structure
You have a clear thesis statement and a conclusion that reflects back on the introduction, which is excellent for structuring your essay.
Task Response
You do a good job of discussing both viewpoints before stating your own opinion, showing a good understanding of the task requirements.

Your opinion

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