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The bar chart below shows the passenger kilometres traveled by different means of transport in the UK in 1990 and 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows the passenger kilometres traveled by different means of transport in the UK in 1990 and 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar graph compares the average travel distance of passengers by billions of kilometres in five different transport categories from 1990 to 2000 in the
Uk
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UK
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.
Overall
, it is evident that the highest travel distance was on buses and rails.
Although
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However
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,
less
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fewer
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 people preferred
bicycle
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bicycles
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,
motorbike
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motorbikes
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, and air. The total average of passengers was notably higher than the previous year. In 1990, the bus and rail
was
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were
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 the highest two transport
was
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apply
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taken by people reaching just around 43 and exactly 40 billion kilometres, respectively. The lowest among the five transport
type
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types
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 was bicycle, motorbike, and air.
By contrast
, in 2000,
mostly
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most
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 people took the rails and buses
which
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and
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 the total distance
traveled
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travelled
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 was relatively similar
which
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apply
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accounted
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accounting
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at
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for
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 45 billion kilometres
traveled
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travelled
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. In air, it has significantly increased by 40%.
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