The charts below show the percentage of workers in three sectors across four countries in 1980 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the percentage of workers in three sectors across four countries in 1980 and 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make

comparisons where relevant.
The charts below show the percentage of workers in three
sector
Change to a plural noun
sectors
show examples
across four
countries
for about 30 years from 1980 to 2010 In 1980,
Germany
's agricultural
industry
accounted for only 0.5%, which was quite low in the year 1980 ,
Next,
the
industry
in
Germany
with the highest rate among
countries
is 60% and the agriculture sector with the highest rate of 70% is mentioned in China. In 2020, there will be huge changes in
countries
such
as
Germany
, the USA, Japan and China. The most typical industries with very high percentages are
Germany
, the USA and Japan with equivalent figures of 80%, 70% and 80% and
Germany
with the lowest
industry
in
this
chart is 0.1% and it has a bit of a sharp increase in China. The service
industry
in other
countries
has a negligible decrease from 40% to 20%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words countries, germany, industry with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • percentage
  • sector
  • distribution
  • dominance
  • decline
  • significant changes
  • employment
  • patterns
  • trends
  • global
  • compare
  • highlight
  • examine
  • identify
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