Some people believe that all companies’ decisions should be decided by managers, while others think that it is better to include employees in decision making. Discuss both views and give your opinion?

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beliefs
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while
running a
company
exacutives should take responsibility
to make
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for making
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every
decisions
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decision
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while
others think that they must consider
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the preference
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preferences
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of workers under their control. Personally, I think collective
decision making
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decision-making
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is more
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convenient
as
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it
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increases
a
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chance of
successful
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a successful
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outcome. On the one hand, managers have
particular
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a particular
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set of skills and knowledge that makes them good
decision makers
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decision-makers
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. As the higher level of
employees
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employees,
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they have
acsess
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access
to plenty of information about their belonging field
such
as business, market, leadership. Ordinary workers most
of
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apply
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the
case
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cases
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specialized only
narrow
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in narrow
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area
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areas
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of work which makes them
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difficult
to see
big
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the big
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picture of the
companies
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company's
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condition. Taking from them advice may confuse
exacutives
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executives
to make successful
decisions
.
For example
, if
company
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a company
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takes
vote
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the vote
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all
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of all
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members of
company
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the company
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about increasing the salary of the all workers everyone would agree, but in the long
run
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run,
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it might bring
company
to the
bancrupt
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bankrupt
bankruptcy
.
On the other hand
,
group
decision making
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decision-making
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may be better in many aspects. When there are many people to bring something to the table and discuss the matter definitely will boost the
likelyhood
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likelihood
of flowless
decisions
.
Furthermore
, as
feel
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the feel
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of their distribution to the big
decisions
all employees will do their best to prove their rightness and it is created
sence
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sense
of belonging to the
group
.
For instance
, in my
childhood
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childhood,
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me
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I
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and my friends had
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an assignment
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assignment
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assignments
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from
schools
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school
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. In
this
assignment
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,
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every
group
should clean one of the waste of the school garden . I do not
now
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know
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why my
group
choosed
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choose
chose
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the leaves, it was very difficult but we did it because it was our
decision
and we protected our ego.
To conclude
,
refering
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referring
to
situation
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the situation
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it can
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be diffrent
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diffrent
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different
to make
decisions
in
company
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the company
a company
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. It is important to know when
chose
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to choose
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group
discussion and when managers should make
decision
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decisions
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on their own. I believe that
collectiv
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collective
discussion
more
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is more
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reliable when it comes to big
decisions
.
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