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Some people believe that all companies’ decisions should be decided by managers, while others think that it is better to include employees in decision making. Discuss both views and give your opinion?

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There common
belife
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beliefs
belief
such
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as
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while
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 running a
company
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 exacutives should take responsibility
to make
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for making
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 every
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decisions
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decision
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while
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 others think that they must consider
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the preference
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preference
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preferences
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 of workers under their control. Personally, I think collective
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decision making
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decision-making
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 is more
convinient
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convenient
 as
its
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it
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 increases
a
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the
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 chance of
successful
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a successful
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 outcome. On the one hand, managers have
particular
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a particular
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 set of skills and knowledge that makes them good
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decision makers
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decision-makers
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. As the higher level of
employees
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employees,
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 they have
acsess
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access
 to plenty of information about their belonging field
such
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 as business, market, leadership. Ordinary workers most
of
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apply
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the
case
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cases
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 specialized only
narrow
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in narrow
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area
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areas
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 of work which makes them
diffucult
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difficult
 to see
big
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the big
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 picture of the
companies
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company's
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 condition. Taking from them advice may confuse
exacutives
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executives
 to make successful
decisions
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 .
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, if
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company
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a company
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 takes
vote
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the vote
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all
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of all
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 members of
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company
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the company
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 about increasing the salary of the all workers everyone would agree, but in the long
run
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run,
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 it might bring
company
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 to the
bancrupt
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bankrupt
bankruptcy
.
On the other hand
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,
group
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decision making
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decision-making
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 may be better in many aspects. When there are many people to bring something to the table and discuss the matter definitely will boost the
likelyhood
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likelihood
 of flowless
decisions
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.
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, as
feel
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the feel
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 of their distribution to the big
decisions
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 all employees will do their best to prove their rightness and it is created
sence
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sense
 of belonging to the
group
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.
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, in my
childhood
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childhood,
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me
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I
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 and my friends had
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an assignment
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assignment
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assignments
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 from
schools
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school
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. In
this
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 assignment
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,
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every
group
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 should clean one of the waste of the school garden . I do not
now
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know
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 why my
group
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choosed
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choose
chose
gather
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to gather
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 the leaves, it was very difficult but we did it because it was our
decision
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 and we protected our ego.
To conclude
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,
refering
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referring
 to
situation
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the situation
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 it can
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be diffrent
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diffrent
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different
 to make
decisions
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 in
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company
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the company
a company
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. It is important to know when
chose
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to choose
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group
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 discussion and when managers should make
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decision
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decisions
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 on their own. I believe that
collectiv
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collective
 discussion
more
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is more
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 reliable when it comes to big
decisions
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.

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Structure
Ensure your essay has a clear structure with well-developed paragraphs. Each paragraph should start with a clear topic sentence followed by supporting details and examples.
Vocabulary
Use a wider range of vocabulary to express your ideas more precisely and to avoid repetition. This will make your argument stronger and more sophisticated.
Grammar and Accuracy
Pay attention to spelling, punctuation, and grammar to avoid small mistakes that can distract the reader from your main points.
Critical Thinking
Engage in critical thinking and present multiple perspectives on the issue before concluding with your own viewpoint. This demonstrates your ability to analyze and synthesize information.
Task Response
You effectively discussed both views and provided your own opinion, demonstrating a strong task response.
Supporting Details
Your essay includes examples and explanations that support your main points, showing your ability to use relevant details to strengthen your argument.
Cohesion
You managed to create cohesion within and between paragraphs, aiding in the overall understandability of your essay.
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