Some people think that getting a degree from university is the best way to guarantee a good job, others believe that it would be byeee to go straight into work and get experience instead. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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that; having a certificate helps them to get a
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having
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my opinion with some reasons.
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university is a very important thing for everyone because everything is
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getting
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is really
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professional
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necessary
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things very better than
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was very simple but
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every thing
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is really better and more modern like having
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builiding
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buildings
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schools are improving so fast. So it`s good to have
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knowledge
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high
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level and how we can use them.
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having
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than having a degree because when a person
learn
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how she or he can do a job in reality is more effective for him or his. And exactly their
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changed
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a lot
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have
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job really
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easier
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people
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who have a degree
with out
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without
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experience
. So if a person
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experience
can be more
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successful
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have
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a certificate.
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having just a degree without any
experience
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