Some people think that getting a degree from university is the best way to guarantee a good job, others believe that it would be byeee to go straight into work and get experience instead. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.
As far as the number of people
Correct pronoun usage
who think
think
that; having a certificate helps them to get a Change the verb form
thinks
well paid
job, Add a hyphen
well-paid
on the other
Linking Words
hand
there are some Add the comma(s)
hand,
another
people Replace the adjective
other
Correct pronoun usage
who thinks
thinks
having Correct subject-verb agreement
think
experience
is better,Use synonyms
I`m agree
with having Change the verb form
I agree
experience
.In Use synonyms
this
Linking Words
essay
I will explain Add a comma
essay,
about
both of Change preposition
apply
Linking Words
this matter
and I`m Fix the agreement mistake
these matters
telling
my opinion with some reasons.
Verb problem
giving
todays Studying
Correct your spelling
Today studying
in
a Change preposition
at
high level
university is a very important thing for everyone because everything is Add a hyphen
high-level
geting
towards a side Correct your spelling
getting
going
wich
is really Correct your spelling
which
profassioncy
and is Correct your spelling
professional
nessesary
for Correct your spelling
necessary
everyody
to Correct your spelling
everybody
khnow
about Correct your spelling
know
the
things very better than Correct article usage
apply
past
. Change preposition
in past
for example
when we were younger Linking Words
every thing
was very simple but Correct your spelling
everything
nowdays
Correct the word
nowadays
every thing
is really better and more modern like having Correct your spelling
everything
foods
, Fix the agreement mistake
food
build
Wrong verb form
building
builiding
, new cars and Correct your spelling
buildings
building
also
schools are improving so fast. So it`s good to have Linking Words
knowlage
about Correct your spelling
knowledge
every thing
Correct your spelling
everything
in
Change preposition
at
high
level and how we can use them.
Correct article usage
a high
Linking Words
However
having Add a comma
However,
experience
is Use synonyms
more productiver
than having a degree because when a person Change the word
more productive
learn
how she or he can do a job in reality is more effective for him or his. And exactly their Correct subject-verb agreement
learns
vison
changed Correct your spelling
vision
alot
and they can Correct your spelling
a lot
hae
a Correct your spelling
have
well paid
job really Add a hyphen
well-paid
esear
than the Correct your spelling
easier
persons
who have a degree Replace the word
people
with out
Correct your spelling
without
experience
.
So if a person Use synonyms
have
Change the verb form
has
experience
can be more Use synonyms
sucssesfull
than a person Correct your spelling
successful
just
Correct pronoun usage
who just
have
a certificate. Change the verb form
has
For
Linking Words
this
Linking Words
reason
I`m not positive Add a comma
reason,
with
having just a degree without any Change preposition
about
experience
.Use synonyms
Submitted by TUTOO on
Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.
Specific Examples
Try to develop your main points with more detailed examples and explanations to strengthen your argument.
Essay Structure
Work on structuring your essay more effectively, with a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion, to improve the clarity of your message.
Task Response
Focus on addressing all parts of the task, including discussing both views fully and providing a more detailed personal opinion.
Linking Words
Improve your coherence by linking ideas more clearly within and between paragraphs.
Position
You've taken a clear stance on the issue, which is good for presenting your argument.
Balance
You attempt to discuss both sides of the argument, which is required by the task.
Fully explain your ideas
To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).
For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:
- Paragraph 1 - Introduction
- Sentence 1 - Background statement
- Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
- Sentence 3 - Thesis
- Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
- Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
- Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
- Sentence 2 - Example
- Sentence 3 - Discussion
- Sentence 4 - Conclusion
- Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
- Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
- Sentence 2 - Example
- Sentence 3 - Discussion
- Sentence 4 - Conclusion
- Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
- Sentence 1 - Summary
- Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
- Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation
Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.