IELTS Writing Correction Service /
Writing Samples /
Band 5

he plans show Ashford in 2010 and Ashford now. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

#plans #show #ashford #summarise #information #features #comparisons #minutes
The map illustrates
,
Remove the comma
apply
show examples
 a
city
, Ashford in 2010 and at present.
Overall
,
it is clear that
, as compared to the past, the
city
 has now become more advanced, with more housing facilities and newly opened sites for recreation.
Moreover
, proper connectivity to the
city
 for its inhabitants has been established. In the past, the eastern side of Ashford was separated from the main
city
, and the only way of travel was by ferry, crossing river Tam,
while
, at present a new bridge has been built to ensure proper travel to the
city
. The earlier ferry docking stations were demolished and replaced with a new bridge. With the rise in population, more
number of
Correct quantifier usage
apply
show examples
houses and buildings have been constructed. Towards the southern side of the housing facilities, a new road has been built, leading to a newly opened yacht marina.
In addition
, efforts have been made to increase the green space, with more trees being planted on the western side as you drive towards the
city
.
Submitted by mshkrp2 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

task response
Ensure that your essay directly addresses the main features of the maps presented, highlighting changes and developments with specific examples.
coherence and cohesion
Organize your essay more effectively by separating descriptions of the city in 2010 and the present into clear, distinct paragraphs. This helps in enhancing the essay's coherence.
coherence and cohesion
Incorporate a wider range of linking words and phrases to better connect ideas and sections of your essay for improved cohesion.
task response
You have provided a clear overall summary of the changes in Ashford, successfully capturing the general trend of development and improvements.
coherence and cohesion
Your introduction and conclusion are present and effectively frame the content of your essay, contributing to its overall structure.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: