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The line graphs below show the subscriptions to mobile and fixed phone lines in four different countries between 2005 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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The two graphs give information on the number of mobile and landline phone contracts in four different countries over a
ten year
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 period, from 2005 to 2015. Throughout the period in the
UK
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UK,
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 there were more subscriptions to mobile lines than there were people, per capita rising to 1.2 in 2007 and remaining stable
thereafter
. The country
also
 had the most fixed phone services though
this
 dropped slightly from approximately 58 to 52 lines per hundred people. Meanwhile, in Uruguay, subscriptions to mobile services increased dramatically, surpassing the UK in 2009 before finishing the period at 1.5
while
 the proportion of fixed lines remained
constantly
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 at around 0.3 per capita. In India, there were similar numbers of subscriptions to both mobile and
fixed line
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 contracts in 2005.
However
, the former rose from around 0.05 to 0.8 per person,
while
 the latter dropped slightly over the decade.
Finally
, despite a slight increase in mobile phone use, numbers for .
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