You're planning to take a vacation. Write a letter to a friend. In your letter: 1. Describe the vacation spot you have chosen 2. Explain how you plan to spend your time there 3. Invite your friend to join you on your vacation.

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Dear Fatimah, I trust

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letter to finds you well and I hope you stay healthy and have fun with your big family. So because

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is my

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leisure time I have

plann

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planned

to going

holiday

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such

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as camping on the

beach

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in Senggigi

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and

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place

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famous

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my island and

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place is

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the favorite

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favorite

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giant number of people

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why a large number of people just

going

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there to enjoy with their family or their friends. I

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planning to relax there and

happy

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talk

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with you,

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is my journey

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week to

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a small party there and

comfortable

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with

a nice music

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and stunning

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environment with acoustic and reggae sound. So

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letter to invite you to have fun on the

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time and

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wood

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fire there and we can enjoyable there with

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then

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you

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at your home I think you will

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mood and cannot doing anything,

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please we survival going to

beach

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to spend your time. Best regard, Ajiburrachman

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Coherence and Cohesion

Work on paragraphing and organizing ideas more clearly to enhance the flow of your letter.

Single Idea per Paragraph

Try to keep your ideas focused and avoid going off-topic within paragraphs for better single idea coherence.

Task Achievement

Ensure you fully explore each part of the task, providing enough detail and development for each point.

Task Achievement

You have successfully communicated your excitement about the vacation spot and made a warm, personal invite, which enhances task achievement.

Writing Tone

Your friendly tone and closing add a nice personal touch to your letter, which is suitable for this kind of correspondence.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
1
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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

7 paragraphs

186 words

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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

Nowadays many people choose to be self-employed, rather than work for a company or organization. Might this be the case? What could be the disadvantages of being self-employed?

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