You're planning to take a vacation. Write a letter to a friend. In your letter: 1. Describe the vacation spot you have chosen 2. Explain how you plan to spend your time there 3. Invite your friend to join you on your vacation.

Dear Fatimah, I trust
this
letter to finds you well and I hope you stay healthy and have fun with your big family. So because
this
my
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leisure time I have
plann
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planned
to going
holiday
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holidays
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such
as camping on the
beach
in Senggigi
beach
and
this
place
so
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is so
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famous
in
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on
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my island and
this
place is
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the favorite
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favorite
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favourite
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a
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of a
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giant number of people
that is
why a large number of people just
going
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go
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there to enjoy with their family or their friends. I
have
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planning to relax there and
happy
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be happy
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talk
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with you,
this
is my journey
in
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this
week to
make
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have
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a small party there and
comfortable
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be comfortable
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with
a nice music
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nice music
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and stunning
view
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views
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like
beautiful
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a beautiful
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environment with acoustic and reggae sound. So
that is
why, I
write
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am writing
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this
letter to invite you to have fun on the
beach
in
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at
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this
time and
make
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have
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wood
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a wood
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fire there and we can enjoyable there with
great
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outlook rather
then
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you
stay
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at your home I think you will
bad
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mood and cannot doing anything,
therefore
please we survival going to
beach
to spend your time. Best regard, Ajiburrachman
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Coherence and Cohesion
Work on paragraphing and organizing ideas more clearly to enhance the flow of your letter.
Single Idea per Paragraph
Try to keep your ideas focused and avoid going off-topic within paragraphs for better single idea coherence.
Task Achievement
Ensure you fully explore each part of the task, providing enough detail and development for each point.
Task Achievement
You have successfully communicated your excitement about the vacation spot and made a warm, personal invite, which enhances task achievement.
Writing Tone
Your friendly tone and closing add a nice personal touch to your letter, which is suitable for this kind of correspondence.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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