You want to sell your bicycle. Your friend has told you that his cousin might like to buy it from you. Write a letter to your friend’s cousin. In your letter explain why you are selling the bicycle describe the bicycle and how much it will cost suggest a date when your friend’s cousin can come and see the bicycle

Dear Hajisuhaidi, I am writing
this
letter to inform you that I want to sell my
bicycle
. In recent
year
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, I change my mind and I want to buy
motorbike
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that is
why I want to sell the
bicycle
to earn money to
buying
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a new motorbike in a
motorshop
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motor shop
in
city
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is
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apply
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like Vespa
matic
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2024.
This
bicycle
from
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when I was
junior
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in junior
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high school my parent
buy
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bought
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it for me to
cycling going
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cycle
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to school,the
bicycle
is strong and you can use
to
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it
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anywhere you want.
Besides
, the colour is blue
combine
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with pink and of course I want to sell my
bicycle
the
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price
around
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of around
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300 AUD Dollars. Because tomorrow is my day off
that is
why if you want to visit my home just tell me
from
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the
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apply
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Email and I would like to prepare the
bicycle
and of
course
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I want to provide you
a
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cup of coffee and snacks. and others. If you
interest
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come
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to my home I will say thank you very much and I wish you with your cousin
stay
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healthy and happy
everytime
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. Best regards, Ajiburrachman
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Task Achievement
To improve task achievement, aim for more precise detailing around the bicycle's features and condition, as this will help the reader make a more informed decision.
Coherence & Cohesion
For coherence and cohesion, work on connecting ideas more smoothly between sentences and paragraphs. This can be enhanced by using a variety of linking words and clearer topic sentences.
Coherence & Cohesion
Try to maintain consistent reasoning throughout your letter to strengthen the logical flow of information.
Task Achievement
You've provided a clear reason for selling the bicycle and suggested a specific time for viewing, which is excellent for task achievement.
Coherence & Cohesion
The greeting and closing of your letter are well-executed, creating a polite and friendly tone.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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