You want to sell your bicycle. Your friend has told you that his cousin might like to buy it from you. Write a letter to your friend’s cousin. In your letter explain why you are selling the bicycle describe the bicycle and how much it will cost suggest a date when your friend’s cousin can come and see the bicycle
Dear Hajisuhaidi,
I am writing
this
letter to inform you that I want to sell my bicycle
.
In recent year
, I change my mind and I want to buy Fix the agreement mistake
years
motorbike
Correct article usage
a motorbike
that is
why I want to sell the bicycle
to earn money to buying
a new motorbike in a Change the form of the verb
buy
motorshop
in Correct your spelling
motor shop
city
Add an article
the city
is
like Vespa Unnecessary verb
apply
matic
2024.
Change the capitalization
Matic
This
bicycle
from
when I was Change preposition
apply
junior
high school my parent Change preposition
in junior
buy
it for me to Wrong verb form
bought
cycling going
to school,the Wrong verb form
cycle
bicycle
is strong and you can use to
anywhere you want. Correct your spelling
it
Besides
, the colour is blue combine
with pink and of course I want to sell my Replace the word
combined
bicycle
the
price Change preposition
at the
around
300 AUD Dollars.
Because tomorrow is my day off Change preposition
of around
that is
why if you want to visit my home just tell me from
Change preposition
by
the
Email and I would like to prepare the Correct article usage
apply
bicycle
and of course
I want to provide youAdd a comma
course,
a
cup of coffee and snacks. and others.
If you Add the preposition
with a
interest
Add a missing verb
are interest
come
to my home I will say thank you very much and I wish you with your cousin Add the particle
to come
stay
healthy and happy Fix the infinitive
to stay
everytime
.
Best regards,
AjiburrachmanReplace the word
every time
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Task Achievement
To improve task achievement, aim for more precise detailing around the bicycle's features and condition, as this will help the reader make a more informed decision.
Coherence & Cohesion
For coherence and cohesion, work on connecting ideas more smoothly between sentences and paragraphs. This can be enhanced by using a variety of linking words and clearer topic sentences.
Coherence & Cohesion
Try to maintain consistent reasoning throughout your letter to strengthen the logical flow of information.
Task Achievement
You've provided a clear reason for selling the bicycle and suggested a specific time for viewing, which is excellent for task achievement.
Coherence & Cohesion
The greeting and closing of your letter are well-executed, creating a polite and friendly tone.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite