The graphs below show the types of music albums purchased by people in Britain according to sex and age. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below. You should write at least 150 words.

The graphs below show the types of music albums purchased by people in Britain according to sex and age. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below. You should write at least 150 words.
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The presented graphs provide information on the rate of British people who bought various types of
music
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(pop,
rock
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and classical) depending on their gender and age.
Overall
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speaking,the highest percentage in both Pop and
Rock
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music
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goes for the ages ranged between 25-34 , 16-24 and males,
however
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, the lowest percentage was among the range of 35-44, females and elderlies.
In contrast
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,elderlies,25-34 years old and males were highly interested in classical
music
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,
while
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,the least one were 16-24,male and female. To commence with the first group,over 30 adults,30 youngsters and just under 30 men were interested in pop,
whereas
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,
this
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was above 30 youth,
around31
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around 31
males and under 30 adults for
rock
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rock
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.
Furthermore
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under 20 females,considerably under 20 and 10 per cent of old-people were the least purchasers.
This
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was similar for
Rock
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as well just with a bit of fluctuation.
Moreover
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, classical
music
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was mostly popular among elderlies and adults who were 20 and under 20 respectively,
hence
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,the other groups were less than 10 per cent interested in classical melody.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words music, rock with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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