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The bar chart gives the top eight online activities in Slovakia in a given month. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where necessary.

The bar chart gives the top eight online activities in Slovakia in a given month. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where necessary.
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The bar chart compares what online activities
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Slovakia
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adult's
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 women and men chose as the most
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 in July. The figure divided the
activies
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activities
 into eight groups. The unit measured in percentage, which is
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user
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 of each
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 have been divided by
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 internet
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,
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, females dominated most of the categories. The activities that had more than 60% of
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the user
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user
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 for all
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genders
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 "using email", "text or instant messaging", "internet banking" and "social networking".
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Furthermore
, both of the genders considered "using email" and "job hunting" to be the most favorite and the least popular, respectively. The gap among the top four displayed small differences between the
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.
This
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 for them since they had the same proportion, at roughly 20%.
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 the other four activities. "Health Research" experienced the most significant gap between women and men. The former was approximately 60% and the latter was around 34%.
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Vocabulary: The word "differences" was used 2 times.
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