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The maps below show a science park in 2008 and the same park today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps below show a science park in 2008 and the same park today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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Contained in two illustrations is information pertaining to the changes which have taken place in a science park from 2008 to until present day. From an observational perspective, the majority of green spaces have been cleared to make way for new buildings and transport facilities.
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, both old and new buildings were linked together by footpaths. Beginning with the
north-eastern
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northeastern
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 half of the park, the grassland was removed to construct a new research and development
center
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centre
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. Moving onto the
north-west
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northwest
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, the reception was repurposed into a university hub
while
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 the offices and the woodland separating
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the north-east
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north-east
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northeast
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 and
north-west
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northwest
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 remained
unchange
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unchanged
.
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, there was a brand-new cycle path and a bus stop installed parallel
with
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to
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 the old main road. Turning to the
south-eastern
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southeastern
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 part of the site, the rectangular cyber security building was reconstructed into an
L shape
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L-shaped
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 building, clearing the green area along the road.
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, the car park was reduced in size
due to
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 the appearance of a train station. Looking to the
south-west
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southwest
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, it can be witnessed that the IT
center
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centre
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 was renamed into an innovation
center
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centre
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.
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, the business units and the bottom left corner woodland stayed the same.

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