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Some businesses find that their new employees lack basic interpersonal skills such as teamwork. What are the causes? Suggest possible solutions.

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Some businesses are noticing that their new hires don't have the basic social skills that are needed for
teamwork
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. Why is
this
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 happening, and what can be done to fix it? Many companies are finding that an increasing number of newly hired employees are found to be lacking many of the fundamental social skills that are essential for
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effective
teamwork
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, the main issue in why
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 is happening can be caused by the lack of training programs prior to entering the
company
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,
such
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 as offering different types of workshops focused on
teamwork
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 including communication, collaboration and problem resolution. That simulates real work scenarios.
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result
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this
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 can drastically increase the
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workers
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 confidence in the field, and by that improve the
overall
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 team performance.
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, team building activities from
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 adventures to
problem solving
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 challenges,
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this
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 the
company
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 can create many opportunities for the employees to work together and build team trust for better
teamwork
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 efficiency.
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, including a healthy feedback mechanism in the
company
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 where the people can
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 and receive constructive criticism from their superiors and
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 from their
co
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workers
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, encourages an open conversation and opens room for future improvements.
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 training programs offer a handful of benefits to
workers
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 from skill development and increasing confidence to improving work performances by fomenting
teamwork
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 with respect and an open
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. Different training programs can serve as an important investment in both the professional growth of
workers
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 and the long-term success of the
company
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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