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the chart below shows the percentage of adults of different age in the UK who used the Internet every day grom 2003-2006.

the chart below shows the percentage of adults of different age in the UK who used the Internet every day grom 2003-2006.
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The graphical representation illustrates the usage of the
Internet
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 in the UK in different
age
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 groups from the
age
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 16 and above 65
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between the
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 2003 to 2006. As per the data, from 2003 to 2006 the highest
Internet
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 use by adults between the ages 16-24 was 100%
whereas
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 the lowest percentage approximately 18% used by the
age
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group
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 is 65 and above.
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, the usage of
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internet
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the internet
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 between the 25-44
age
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group
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 was 50% in 2003 and rose to 80% by 2006 with
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overall
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an overall
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 30% increase in these 3
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 of gap.
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 between 2003 and 2006, the following
age
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group
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 45-54 consumption of
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Internet
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the Internet
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 started at 60% and reached 80% with a slight inclination.
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, 55
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 to 65+
age
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group
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 adults use less
internet
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 in over all
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.
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, the young
age
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 between 16-44 people were used a high amount of
Internet
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 and the other
age
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 groups were
in contrast
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 in usage.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words internet, age, years, group with synonyms.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Digital adoption
  • Internet usage trends
  • Age demographics
  • Technological literacy
  • Digital divide
  • Online banking
  • Social media platforms
  • Professional life
  • Accessibility
  • Online shopping
  • Engagement
  • Daily users
  • Barriers to adoption
  • Entertainment
  • Staying connected
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