The diagram below shows the process of using water to produce electricity. Summarise the information in the diagram to explain how the system works.

The diagram below shows the process of using water to produce electricity. 

 

Summarise the information in the diagram to explain how the system works.
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The given diagram depicts the process of generating
electricity
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by using hot underground water.
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, the picture below illustrates
generation
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the generation
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of
electricity
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by using geothermal energy,
it is clear that
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these
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process comprises 6 stages which can be grouped into 3 main steps, beginning with the pumping of liquid and ending with the backing down of pumped rain.
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, there is a vital resource
such
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as water.
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, the cycle begins with taking a hot substance from the underground and
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it is pumped by
turbine
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the turbine
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,as it pumps out it goes through
heat
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a heat
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exchanger which extracts that heat, so a
power
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station can be run.
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,
electricity
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is generated in a specialized machine called a
power
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station ,
then
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it is sent to the national grid by which it can be consumed by people.
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,
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the depiction used cool water is sent back to
layer
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a layer
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of hot rock. Obviously, a major role is played by the
power
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station where
electricity
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is generated and
then
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where used liquid can
be appear
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as a
power
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.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words electricity, power with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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