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Water consumption The graph and table below give information about water use worldwide and water consumption in two different countries.

Water consumption The graph and table below give information about water use worldwide and water consumption in two different countries.
#water #consumption #information #two #countries
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show
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shows
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 information about
use
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the use
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 of
water
 around the world by sector,
while
table
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the table
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 presents data about
water
 consumption in different
country
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countries
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 which are
Brazil
 and
Congo
 in 2000. Looking from an
overall
 perspective, it is obviously seen that the most significant facts are agriculture was the most
water utilizing
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water-utilizing
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 field during
given
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a given
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 period of time, and the population of
Brazil
was
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consumed
much
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more
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water
 than
Congo
.
Initially
,
while
 the amount of
water
which
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used for agriculture was 500,000 tons in 1900, it sharply increased to 2
million
 tons over the next 100-year period.
Although
,
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 the figures for the
water
 which
consumed
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was consumed
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for
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by
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industrial
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the industrial
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 and domestic
field
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fields
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 were 0
ton
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tons
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, they slightly rose to 1
million
 and 200,000 tons respectively, from 1900 to 2000. Regarding utilization of
water
 in
Brazil
 and
Congo
,
while
 consumption of
water
 for each person was 359
ton
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tons
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 in
Brazil
 with 176
million
 population, that of Democratic Republic of
Congo
 was 8
ton
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tons
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 with 5.2
million
 residents in 2000.
Although
 the area of irrigated land was 26,500 square km, that of
Congo
 was 100 square km, in two
thousands
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thousand
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "although, while".
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 69%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, brazil, congo, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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