Academic Writting practice Test 3 Water consumption The graph and table below give information about water use worldwide and water consumption in two different countries.
The provided line graph
show
information about the use of Correct subject-verb agreement
shows
water
around the world by sector, while
the table presents data about water
consumption in different countries which are Brazil
and Congo
in 2000.
Looking from an overall
perspective, it is obviously seen that the most significant facts are agriculture was the most water utilizing
field during a given period of time, and the population of Add a hyphen
water-utilizing
Brazil
was
consumed Unnecessary verb
apply
much
Correct quantifier usage
more
water
than Congo
.
Initially
, while
the amount of water
used for agriculture was 500,000 tons
in 1900, it sharply increased to 2 million
tons
over the next 100-year period. Although
the figures for the water
which was consumed by the industrial and domestic fields were 0 tons
, they slightly rose to 1 million
and 200,000 tons
respectively, from 1900 to 2000.
Regarding utilization of water
in Brazil
and Congo
, while
consumption of water
for each person was 359 ton
in Fix the agreement mistake
tons
Brazil
with 176 million
population, that of Democratic Republic of Congo
was 8 ton
with 5.2 Fix the agreement mistake
tons
million
residents in 2000. Although
the area of irrigated land was 26,500 square km, that of Congo
was 100 square km, in two thousands
.Change to singular
thousand
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "although, while".
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, brazil, congo, tons, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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