The map shows the public library 20 years ago and now. Compare and summarise the information in about 150 words.

The map shows the public library 20 years ago and now. Compare and summarise the information in about 150 words.
These two maps depict the inside of a public
library
in two distinctive timelines,
one
is from 20 years ago and the other is from nowadays.
Overall
, we can see that a lot of changes happened in
this
place
,
however
, the major
one
is that, 20 years ago,
this
library
was a recreation
place
for adults and children, these days, is more about learning and educating.
Firstly
, in the centre of
this
public
library
, there used to be tables and chairs for customers,
in
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present, they are gone completely and the centre is empty.
Secondly
, on the east
side
of
this
place
, adult-none fiction
books
are not there anymore ,
instead
, there is an information desk and next to that we can see self-service machines,
also
, they moved adult fiction
books
which used to be on the west
side
, right now is on the east
side
next to the information desk.
Thirdly
, a cafe has been erected in the south and
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over the
place
of the enquiry desk which was there 20 years ago,
moreover
, there was a
room
for reading newspapers and magazines in the past, which is now turned into a computer
room
, we can see
this
room
on the south-west of the
library
.
Lastly
, today, on the north
side
there are two rooms,
one
of them is on the east and the other
one
is on the west, they are for lectures and children. In the children’s
room
, there is an event about storytelling for children,
also
, people can find children’s fiction
books
in
this
room
too,in the past,
this
place
was for computer games and children’s
books
used to be on the east
side
which now is turned into the lecture
room
.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words library, one, place, side, books, room with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • evolve
  • renovation
  • infrastructure
  • amenities
  • state-of-the-art
  • landscape
  • pedestrian
  • augment
  • spatial
  • demolish
  • construct
  • accessibility
  • innovations
  • extensions
  • facade
  • environmental-friendly
  • urban development
  • public facility
  • modernize
  • technology integration
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