The tourism industry has grown enormously over the last fifty years, and there are few places which are unaffected by it. However, tourism rarely benefits the countries which tourists visit. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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half century, the
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a greater extent but there is a still small portion of places which
tourist
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havent
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haven't
touched yet.
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, it has been believed that the parts of
world
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where
tourist
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tourists
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visits
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doesnt
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have much help
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tourism
. I strongly disagree with the statement and to justify my opinion, I will be sharing
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facts with an example in
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following paragraph.
Firstly
, There are many countries which are popular for their landscape and
beaultiful seneric
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beautiful scenic
view
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views
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. To cite an example, Indonesia is a favourite
tourist
destination for its astonishing
view
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views
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and beaches.
Tourist
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love to swim and hike in Indonesia.
Furthermore
,
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part of the economy is dependent upon
tourism
. If
tourist
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stop visiting Indonesia
then
the country might face major crises. Adding to that the locals in the country are
also
supported by the
tourist
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tourists
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as they buy
souvenir
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souvenirs
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while
heading back home.
This
not only
help
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locals but
also
attacts
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attracts
attacks
more
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tourists
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after hearing all the positives from fellow
tourist
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. To elaborate more on my point, There are many countries in Asia
such
as Thailand, Phillippines,
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lanka
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which are
tourist
dependent and to
attact
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attract
more
tourist
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tourists
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, government bodies
largly
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largely
invest in maintaining the
asthetic
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aesthetic
view and the
cleaniness
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cleanliness
in the country. There are several
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launched by the government where locals have the opportunity to join the cause.
This
not only provides
opportuntiy
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opportunity
opportunities
but
also
provides passive income.
To sum up
,
Tourism
has
immensly
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immensely
grown in
last
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half century and it has helped many countries in
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terms
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of
economy
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the economy
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.
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