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The company you work for has decided to close the cafeteria, as the staff is not using it much. You are not happy with the decision. Write a letter to the director  Give reasons of low usage  How it will affect the staff  Suggest ways to improve it

#company #work #cafeteria #staff #decision #director #usage
Dear Sir/ Madam, I am writing
this
 letter regarding
decide
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the decision
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 to close the cafeteria, i was inconsiderate about
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the dicision
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dicision
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decision
division
due to
 we unable
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to ultilize
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ultilize
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utilise
 several
provide
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providers
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. I must explain that
reasons
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the reasons
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of
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for
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 low
ultilize
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utilize
 not a lot of
provide
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provided
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, as you know our
staff
unable
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are unable
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using
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to use
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 facilities at
cafeteria
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the cafeteria
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 like wifi, kitchen, and a
lot
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lot of
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 water
at
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in
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bathroom
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the bathroom
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.
this
 is
a
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apply
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uncomfortable for our
member
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members
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,
i
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I
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 think we will need
compline
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a compline
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 and change
decide
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to decide
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. So far
staff
 become
lazy
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too lazy
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 to attend to
company
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the company
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.
i
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I
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 think
this
 is
big
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a big
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 mistake decision because facilities
overther
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other
overture
 is crucial for
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employees
employers
employess
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employees
, so that way if we can not
using
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use
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 provide we will be unhappy and I
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reckon
rack on
rackon
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think
 our
staff
 will be resign I think we make
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a circel
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circel
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circle
 to
disscus
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discuss
discus
 about
mistake
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mistakes
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, like
increasee
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increasing
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the fasility
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fasility
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facility
 for our
staff
 able
using
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to use
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 a lot of facilities and
became
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become
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 satisfice and happy
do
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to do
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job
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their job
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, not resigen. enough for us to
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receive
recive
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receive
this
 is
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brief
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a brif
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brif
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brief
 from my
complain
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complaint
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 your
sienceerly
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sincerely
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Coherence & Cohesion
Try to structure your letter into clear paragraphs with an introductory statement, followed by reasons, impacts, and suggestions.
Coherence & Cohesion
Use transitional phrases to link your ideas more smoothly within and across paragraphs.
Task Achievement
Ensure your letter addresses all parts of the task by providing clear reasons for the low usage, detailing its effects, and offering specific suggestions for improvement.
Task Achievement
Consider the tone of your letter. While it is generally suitable, it could be made more formal by avoiding conversational language and ensuring correct usage of formal expressions.
General
Check your spelling, grammar, and punctuation to enhance readability and formality.
Task Engagement
You made an effort to engage with the task by addressing the key points required: reasons for low usage, impact on staff, and suggestions.
Greeting & Closing
Your closing was polite and appropriate for a letter of this nature, helping to end your correspondence on a respectful note.

The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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