The company you work for has decided to close the cafeteria, as the staff is not using it much. You are not happy with the decision. Write a letter to the director  Give reasons of low usage  How it will affect the staff  Suggest ways to improve it

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Coherence & Cohesion

Try to structure your letter into clear paragraphs with an introductory statement, followed by reasons, impacts, and suggestions.

Coherence & Cohesion

Use transitional phrases to link your ideas more smoothly within and across paragraphs.

Task Achievement

Ensure your letter addresses all parts of the task by providing clear reasons for the low usage, detailing its effects, and offering specific suggestions for improvement.

Task Achievement

Consider the tone of your letter. While it is generally suitable, it could be made more formal by avoiding conversational language and ensuring correct usage of formal expressions.

General

Check your spelling, grammar, and punctuation to enhance readability and formality.

Task Engagement

You made an effort to engage with the task by addressing the key points required: reasons for low usage, impact on staff, and suggestions.

Greeting & Closing

Your closing was polite and appropriate for a letter of this nature, helping to end your correspondence on a respectful note.

The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

Best regards,
Warm wishes,

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

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Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

7 paragraphs

161 words

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