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The diagram below shows the water cycle in both forested and urban areas. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows the water cycle in both forested and urban areas. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The first process illustrates
rainfall
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the rainfall
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 cycle of a rural
area
,
while
second
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the second
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 one displays
precipitation
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the precipitation
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 of an urban
area
.
Overall
, there are 6 stages in each
of
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apply
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illustration, starting with
precipitation
 and ending with runoff. and there are
some
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quite a lot of differences between the rainfall cycles between forest and urban
area
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areas
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.
Also
, it is worth mentioning that the cycle is cyclical. There are 4 stages that happen above the ground, they are
precipitation
, evaporation, transportation and runoff.
Precipitation
 is the same in each illustration,
however
, the other 5 stages vary in the amount produced, the level of pollution or both. As an example, the amount of evaporation, transpiration, infiltration and baseflow
are
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 reduced, but the level of pollution is the same. The amount of runoff is
more
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higher
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 in a built-up
area
 and is more polluted
that
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than
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 in a rural
area
,
also
, erosion is
also
 increased in an urban
area
.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words area, precipitation with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Precipitation
  • Absorption
  • Groundwater recharge
  • Evapotranspiration
  • Surface runoff
  • Impervious surfaces
  • Concrete
  • Asphalt
  • Stormwater systems
  • Vegetation
  • Water vapor
  • Local climate conditions
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