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The maps below show the development of a seaside village between 1995 to present.

The maps below show the development of a seaside village between 1995 to present.
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The given maps display the redevelopment of a seaside suburb from 1995 until the present.
Overall
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, the tourist facilities have been constructed for tourist purposes,
whereas
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 the residential area has been enlarged.
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, there are still 2 amenities that have remained untouched. Beginning with the western side of the street where more houses are added in order to
fulfill
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fulfil
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 the demand
of
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for
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 accommodation,
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while
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the local shops located near the beachside
has
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 been redeveloped
to
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into
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 a row of restaurants serving meals for tourism. Moving to the commercial area of selling
sea food
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seafood
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, the row of fish markets has been made way for apartments and the nearby fishing port
is
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 demolished. As for the east part of the street, the green space has been
knocked-down
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knocked down
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 for the purpose of making tourist development including golf
as well as
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 tennis course. It is
also
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 worth
mentioned
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 that the cafe
together with
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 the hotel near the seaside
are
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is
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 still kept with
an
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extra parking
in
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on
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 the hotel's campus.
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