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The map details a town now and a proposed future layout.

#town #future #layout
The two pictures compare the
town
 now with a proposed future layout. Looking from an
overall
 perspective, it is readily apparent that the proposed plan wants to redesign the
town
 to become more industrial and more accessible. Different routes will be established in different parts of the
town
. In
present
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 day, there is a roundabout which
connect
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 the A2
road
 to the
Air field
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Airfield
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 and
center
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centre
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 of the
town
. In the presented plan, the
existed
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 roundabout will be shifted a little bit south,
also
 a new roundabout will be established at the
center
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centre
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 of the city, right on the
center
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 of the railway. The
Air field
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Airfield
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 will be replaced by
industrial
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an industrial
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 estate, and another path will connect
this
are
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area
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 to the railway.
According to
 the presented plan,
while
Town
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center
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centre
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 and gas station will remain unchanged, a new
road
 will be built in the southernmost part of the
town
 (A4) which
connect
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connects
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 the A2
road
 and
new
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the new
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 roundabout.
Also
, a side
road
 will connect the
Town
center
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 to the A4.
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task achievement
You have adequately described the proposed future layout and compared it to the present layout, which ensures that the task requirement is met. However, adding more specific details, especially about the connectivity and functionality of the new routes, could further enhance the clarity of your response.
coherence and cohesion
While your essay is logically structured and provides a good overall perspective, adding a clear conclusion would help in summarizing the key points more effectively. This would make your essay more cohesive.
task achievement
Your essay does a good job of comparing the current layout with the proposed future layout, showing clear understanding of the task requirements.
coherence and cohesion
You have used transition words effectively to guide the reader through the various changes in the town layout, which improves the logical flow of the essay.

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