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Some people prefer to spend most of their time with friends. Other people prefer to be alone most of the time. Which way of life do you prefer? Use specific reasons to support your answer.

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Today, many
people
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 like to be with their
friends
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 most of the
time
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. On the other side, some
people
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 are eager to be alone most of the
time
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.
According to
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friends
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 is better than being alone. Because
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soleness
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 will lead the
person
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 toward some diseases and makes the
person
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 away from society.
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 who struggle with depression have been alone for a long
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. When a guy is alone and does not have any specific hobby automatically he will start thinking about useless matters.
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, that
person
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 will worry and have a lot of tension. To exemplify
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criminals who are in solo cells in prison have depression and some mental problems because of being alone for the long term.
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, humans are social creatures and need to be in the community. And
soleness
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 makes the
person
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 aware of the crowd. When a
person
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 is out of society he will not have any
friends
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 having no
friends
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 is a very hard
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dilemma since he does not have anyone who
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 his hand and supports him.
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,
while
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 being with
friends
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 we will learn new things from our
friends
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besides
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, we can have some activities
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 football, tennis and badminton and we will enjoy ourselves a lot in comparison to
soleness
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. Summing up, some
people
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 are eager to be alone most of the
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while
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 others tend to be with
friends
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. Regarding my opinion and the mentioned reasons in
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 with
friends
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 is more beneficial in comparison to
soleness
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.

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transitions
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introduction conclusion
Introduced and concluded the essay effectively, clearly stating your position.
main points
Successfully outlined main points that were relevant to the topic and your argument, demonstrating an understanding of task requirements.
engagement
Made a clear effort to address the topic and provided reasons for your viewpoint, showing engagement with the task.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • preference
  • solitude
  • social skills
  • emotional support
  • self-reflection
  • personal growth
  • sense of belonging
  • mental health
  • sense of community
  • concentration
  • productivity
  • lasting memories
  • creativity
  • perspective
  • original thought
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