You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The graphs below show the total percentage of films released and the total percentage of ticket sales in 1996 and 2006 in a country. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

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The graph that I am

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talk about here shows the total

percentage

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of films released and the total

percentage

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of cinema ticket sales between the

years

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1996 and 2006. These two graphs are

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separated

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four main genres which are

Drama

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Comedy

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Fantacy

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Fantasy

and

Romance

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, in 2006 the

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drama

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number of drama

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films were higher than that of 1996 films

as well as

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comedy

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also

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had a higher

percentage

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in the 2006 mark.

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to fantasy

which

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apply

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also

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had a higher

percentage

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in 2006 even though it was one of the least

favorite

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favourite

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genres throughout the

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with

romance

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being the least of all. Now

lets

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talk about the list of genre

favorites

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in the

years

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1996 and 2006,

Comedy

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had the highest

percent

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percentage

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of cinema ticket sales with

drama

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below it and

then

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fantasy and

romance

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the bottom of the list

while

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Drama

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had the highest

percentage

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of film releases with

Comedy

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in 2nd

then

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fantasy

as well as

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romance

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became

last

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also

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Romance

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had the same

percent

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per cent

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of film releases in both 1996 and 2006

years

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while

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the

percent

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per cent

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of cinema tickets was higher in 1996.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, years, drama, comedy, romance with synonyms.

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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

1 paragraphs

188 words

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