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the bar chart below shows the top ten countrie for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.

the bar chart below shows the top ten countrie for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.
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The bar chart illustrates the amount of
electricity
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produced and consumed by
top
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 ten countries in the year 2014.
Overall
, China was the country that produced and consumed the most
of
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electricity
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the Korea
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Korea
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 Republic was the least. China produced 5,398
electricity
 and consumed 5,322 during the year
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 became the highest compared
other
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 countries in that year. It was followed by
United
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 States, as the second largest of
electricity
 production and consumption, with
produced
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4,099 and consumed 3,866. Another significant feature is
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the Korea
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Korea
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 Republic
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 just produced 485,1 and consumed 449,5 as the lowest one.
This
 number, interestingly, was under Germany with 526,6 of
electricity
 production and 582,5 its consumption or Brazil
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produced 530,7 and consumed 455,8.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • electricity production
  • electricity consumption
  • gigawatt hours (GWh)
  • renewable energy sources
  • non-renewable energy sources
  • industrialization
  • economic activities
  • carbon footprint
  • sustainability
  • energy efficiency
  • power generation
  • grid capacity
  • energy policies
  • consumption patterns
  • energy demand
  • production-consumption disparity
  • environmental impact
  • greenhouse gas emissions
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