You have recently moved to a different city. You did not have a chance to tell your friend about the move. Write a letter to this friend. In your letter Explain why you decided to move Compare your new home with your previous home Tell him/her about the area you are now living in

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Dear Phuc I am writing

this

letter regarding moving to a new place of residence. I

really

Add a missing verb

am really

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happiness

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happy

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and cheer fun.

However

, I would

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like to

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mention that I’m

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summer holiday and can

helps

Change the verb form

help

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you move furniture and clean

house

Correct article usage

the house

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Firstly

, I found that your house is quite messy and has a lot of furniture.

Moreover

, it seems to me that your new house is

also

quite close to my home.

On the other hand

, I would like to request that, I’m curious about is details. Is that area safe? Is it near the supermarket?

Additionally

, if you need

supports

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support

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, contract for me.

Besides

that, I am looking forward to offering from you. I hope to hear from you soon. Best regards Mr Phung

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Task Response

The letter does not accurately address the prompt about your own experience moving to a new city. Instead, it appears to be responding to someone else about their move. Focus on the task's requirements.

Coherence and Cohesion

Clarify your ideas and make sure each paragraph focuses on a single point. The current structure is somewhat disorganized.

Writing Tone

Use suitable greetings and closings for a letter to a friend. The closing signature 'Mr Phung' feels too formal.

Task Achievement

Expand on your experiences and comparisons rather than asking questions about the friend's location. The task asks for your experiences and comparisons.

Writing Tone

You expressed a willingness to help and show concern for your friend, which is friendly and appropriate.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 150 words in writing task 1. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long letter will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 160 to 190 words in writing task 1. This will ensure a concise letter and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 20 minutes to write the letter and you need around 5 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long letter in 15 minutes.

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8
Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
0
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7
Grammar mistakes
detected issues

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

6 paragraphs

124 words

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You have recently moved to a different city. You did not have a chance to tell your friend about the move. Write a letter to this friend. In your letter Explain why you decided to move Compare your new home with your previous home Tell him/her about the area you are now living in

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