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The maps below show the village of Stokeford in 1930 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps below show the village of Stokeford in 1930 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The maps illustrate the developments which took place in
a
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the
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village
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 of Stakeford in two different
years
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 (1930 and 2010).
Overall
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, a comparison of the two maps reveals a complete transformation from a largely rural to a mainly urban
area
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. In the year 1930, the
village
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 was a much greener
area
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 with a few
houses
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, but during the next 80
years
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, the
village
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 saw a number of significant changes. On the west side of
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village
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the village
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, the agricultural
area
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 was removed to make way for a new residential
area
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 along the road.
Furthermore
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, the shops which were located next to the post office were removed and they were replaced with a new junction with more
houses
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 along it.
However
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, the post office remained unchanged in both
years
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.
In contrast
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, only a few
houses
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 in the north of
river
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the river
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 remained but they put
a much
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a much house
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houses
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 . and the primary school in the west along
school
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the school
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. and the garden in the south of the river
they
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apply
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removed and they put a retirement home there are a few trees they removed
it
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apply
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and the farmland in the north of
river
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the river
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removed
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was removed
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 .
however
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, the bridge in the north remained unchanged in both
years
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words village, years, area, houses with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "unchanged" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • village
  • maps
  • Stokeford
  • 1930
  • 2010
  • main features
  • overview
  • changes
  • similarities
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