The chart shows British Emigration to selected destinations between 2004 and 2007.Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart gives information about five countries
according to
a different period from 2004 until 2007 .To begin
the bar chart describes the average of the survey duering
in these Correct your spelling
during
peirod
. Correct your spelling
period
periods
Overall
,as can be expected all the data and the nation chosen
Add a hyphen
nation-chosen
a destinations
Correct the article-noun agreement
destinations
a destination
such
as Australia , Spain , New Zealand , The USA and France. In the same way, Australia in 2006 was
the highest of guests there was 60,000 Verb problem
had
besides
that it dropped the figure of
passengers Change preposition
for
moreover
Australia in 2005 declined substantially . Add a missing verb
was moreover
In
the other hand, Spain did not change depending on these years Change preposition
On
as well as
reminded
and a growth slightly . In Verb problem
remained
this
case, New Zealand and The USA were equally
Change the word
equal
of
visitors Change preposition
in
also
, they a round of number 30.000 or 20.000 in all years . In addition
, France is
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apply
a
jumped sharply Correct article usage
apply
at
34.000 in 2005 Change preposition
to
to conclude
that in 2007 France did decrease dramatically it reached 15.000 !Submitted by nahlaalrashidi on
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