the charts below show the percentages of men and women aged 60-64 in employment in four countries in 1970 and 2000. Write at least 150 words.

the charts below show the percentages of men and women aged 60-64 in employment in four countries in 1970 and 2000. Write at least 150 words.
The charts provide key information about the
ratio
of both genders aged 60-64 in work in four nations in two different years.
Overall
, it can be seen that Japan showed the highest proportion of men and women in employment compared to other countries, in 1970 and 2000.
In addition
, in 1970, in
Belgium
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Belgium,
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the
ratio
of elderly males in work was very high in comparison to its
ratio
, in 2000,
whereas
there was a slight difference between the
ratio
of aged females, in 1970 and 2000 for the same country.
According to
what is shown, Australian men accounted for 74%, in 1970 and 47%, in 2000.
In addition
, the American males represented 73%, in 1970, which was higher than its
ratio
, in 2000, at 55%. In 1970, 76% was the percentage of Japanese males, which was the highest one,
while
the lowest
ratio
of them was in Belgium, at 19%. In terms of aged women, there was a tiny difference
by
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1% in the
ratio
of them in employment in 1970 and 2000, in Australia and Belgium. The
ratio
was nearly similar, in Japan, at 43% in 1970 and 40%, in 2000, and it was a similar trend in the USA.
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