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The diagrams below show two hostel rooms that can be occupied by several people. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagrams below show two hostel rooms that can be occupied by several people. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The
two
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 diagrams show the layout of the
two
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hostels
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hostel
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 rooms. It is easy to notice that the left
room
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 costs 50$ per night
while
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 the right
one
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 is more expensive (90$ per night), causing a difference in maximum number of guests who can accommodate. Only
two
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 people can use the cheaper
room
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 and the other
room
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 can accommodate
maximum
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a maximum
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4
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of 4
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people. It is
also
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 notable that
room
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 A has
two
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 single
beds
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,
one
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 closet,
one
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 bathroom and
one
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 sink. In
addtion
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addition
, there is a spacious
stairs
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stair
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 in
this
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room
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.
In contrast
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, the right layout vividly illustrates that
room
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 B has more
furnitures
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furniture
types of furniture
pieces of furniture
items of furniture
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such
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 as the refrigerator and the bookshelves.
Additionally
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,
this
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room
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 occupies
two
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 bathrooms and
beds
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, even though those are bunk
beds
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, not single
beds
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.
One
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 noticeable thing is that there is even a sofa, a table, and a TV in the middle of
this
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 space.
Overall
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, the
diagrmas
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diagrams
 clearly demonstrate that
room
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 A has exactly
essential
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the essential
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 facilities
such
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 as
beds
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, a closet, and a bathroom
while
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 there are more various facilities like a table, a TV, and a sofa in
room
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 B.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "such, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words two, room, one, beds with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "show" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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