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The diagrams below show two hostel rooms that can be occupied by several people. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagrams below show two hostel rooms that can be occupied by several people. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The
two
 diagrams show the layout of the
two
hostels
Change the noun form
hostel
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 rooms. It is easy to notice that the left
room
 costs 50$ per night
while
 the right
one
 is more expensive (90$ per night), causing a difference in maximum number of guests who can accommodate. Only
two
 people can use the cheaper
room
 and the other
room
 can accommodate
maximum
Correct article usage
a maximum
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4
Change preposition
of 4
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people. It is
also
 notable that
room
 A has
two
 single
beds
,
one
 closet,
one
 bathroom and
one
 sink. In
addtion
Correct your spelling
addition
, there is a spacious
stairs
Correct the article-noun agreement
stair
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 in
this
room
.
In contrast
, the right layout vividly illustrates that
room
 B has more
furnitures
Change the wording
furniture
types of furniture
pieces of furniture
items of furniture
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such
 as the refrigerator and the bookshelves.
Additionally
,
this
room
 occupies
two
 bathrooms and
beds
, even though those are bunk
beds
, not single
beds
.
One
 noticeable thing is that there is even a sofa, a table, and a TV in the middle of
this
 space.
Overall
, the
diagrmas
Correct your spelling
diagrams
 clearly demonstrate that
room
 A has exactly
essential
Correct article usage
the essential
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 facilities
such
 as
beds
, a closet, and a bathroom
while
 there are more various facilities like a table, a TV, and a sofa in
room
 B.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "such, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words two, room, one, beds with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "show" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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