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Your company has recently introduced a new uniform for the staff. But you have learned that the staff members are not happy about it. Write a letter to your manager about it. In your letter, •explain why you think the staffs are not happy with the new uniform •what you want the new uniform to be like •and give some suggestions to handle the situation

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Dear manager I am writing
this
 letter to regard your company has introduced a new
uniform
 for the
staff
, but several of the
staff
members
is
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are
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 not happy about it. And
i
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I
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 represent all the employees to send
this
 letter
for
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to
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 you first of all, we are to disagree, if you change a
uniform
 who to formal and difficult to wear every enter to office. We want to wear
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the uniform
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uniform
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uniforms
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 who informal flexible
and
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apply
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easy to wear every day, and suitable for all
staff
members
 so your
staff
 feel happy
However
, we want all
staff
members
wear
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to wear
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 the old
uniform
 and simple a
uniform
 and
more
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apply
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prefer free to
uniform
 and
fexible
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flexible
 so that all
staff
members
 feel comfortable and enjoy I hope your company agree about
this
complain
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complaint
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 and you can fast
respont
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respond
response
 about
this
 problem. I hope we
are
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apply
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can wear
a
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an
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 old
uniform
 again. I look forward to hearing from you yours sincerely
bobon
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bonbon
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Grammar
Be mindful of verb tenses to ensure consistency and accuracy across your letter. For example, 'is not happy' should be 'are not happy' when referring to the staff members.
Structure
Consider using a more structured layout with clear paragraphs to better organize your points. Each paragraph should introduce a separate idea or suggestion.
Vocabulary
Use a range of sentence structures and vocabulary to enrich your letter and convey your points more effectively. For example, instead of repeatedly using 'uniform' and 'happy', you could incorporate synonyms or related terms to provide variety.
Punctuation and Spacing
Work on punctuation and spacing. Remember that there should be no space before a comma or period, and always include a space after these punctuation marks.
Task Response
Your attempt to discuss all the required bullet points from the task shows an effort to fully respond to the task given.
Tone
Your politeness and formal tone in addressing the manager is appropriate for the context of a letter.
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