The diagram below shows a simple system that turn dirty water into clean water. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant.
The layout portrays the steps of converting impured
water
into pure prepared for drinking.
Overall
, it is a three-stage man-made process using machines to purify dirty water
into clean water
.
at
the beginning, unclear Change the preposition
in
water
is poured by hand into a large cylindrical plastic barrel covered with a plastic lid. Inside this
container, the water
will pass through three drums. The first one is the largest storage drum that will store water
above. Water
will pass from it to enter the sand layer in the second drum. Furthermore
, the water
will continue to move reaching
the third drum that contains two layers of a small amount of charcoal Change the verb form
to reach
as well as
adequate gravel.
Water
is now ready to be transferred to another huge saving barrel through a connection that links the two barrels together. The water
will be stored in this
drum and it is completely clean to be consumed for drinking.Submitted by Selfigih7 on
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