The diagram below shows a simple system that turn dirty water into clean water. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant.

The diagram below shows a simple system that turn dirty water into clean water.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant.
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The layout portrays the steps of converting impured
water
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into pure prepared for drinking.
Overall
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, it is a three-stage man-made process using machines to purify dirty
water
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into clean
water
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.
at
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in
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the beginning, unclear
water
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is poured by hand into a large cylindrical plastic barrel covered with a plastic lid. Inside
this
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container, the
water
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will pass through three drums. The first one is the largest storage drum that will store
water
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above.
Water
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will pass from it to enter the sand layer in the second drum.
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, the
water
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will continue to move
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the third drum that contains two layers of a small amount of charcoal
as well as
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adequate gravel.
Water
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is now ready to be transferred to another huge saving barrel through a connection that links the two barrels together. The
water
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will be stored in
this
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drum and it is completely clean to be consumed for drinking.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Basic structure: Change the first paragraph.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words water with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the first paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • filtration system
  • gravel layer
  • sand layer
  • charcoal layer
  • impurities
  • boiling process
  • bacteria
  • microorganisms
  • condensation stage
  • purified
  • contaminated water
  • potable water
  • transformation
  • capture
  • remove large impurities
  • remove small impurities
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