The diagram below shows the stages and equipment used in the cement-making process, and how cement is used to produce concrete for building purposes.
The diagram illustrates detailed steps of making
cement
and its subsequent Use synonyms
used
in Replace the word
use
concrete
production process.
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the concrete
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, Linking Words
stages
in producing Correct article usage
the stages
cement
are more complex Use synonyms
compare
to the creation of concrete which only Wrong verb form
compared
consist
of certain Change the verb form
consists
recipe
and mixing Fix the agreement mistake
recipes
activity
.
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activities
journey
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the journey
ot
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of
the
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apply
cement
production starts Use synonyms
from
crushing limestone and clay together. The refined materials Change preposition
with
then
will be mixed and continue to flow into Linking Words
rotating
heater, before Add an article
the rotating
a rotating
granulated
into smaller grains using Add a missing verb
being granulated
grinder
, which are Add an article
a grinder
the grinder
then
called Linking Words
cement
as Use synonyms
finished
product. Add an article
a finished
the finished
This
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finish
product will Change the verb form
finished
then
be packed and delivered to Linking Words
customer
.
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the customer
Lastly
, Linking Words
cement
becomes one of the ingredients of making concrete. The composition Use synonyms
use
15% of Change the verb form
uses
cement
, 10% of water, 25% of sand and 50% of gravel. Use synonyms
Finally
, all will be mixed together using Linking Words
mixer
to produce concrete.Add an article
a mixer
the mixer
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