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The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart displays how much
electricity
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 was produced and consumed by 10
countries
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 within the year
of
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2024.
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, the
production
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 of
electricity
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 surpassed its consumption in all
countries
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 except for Germany. There are five
countries
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 that produce more than 700
billion
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KWh
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 in 2024 and the highest producer amongst these five
countries
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 is China, with a total
electricity
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production
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 of 5.398
billion
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KWh
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.
United
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 States was in
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second place with a total
electricity
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production
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 of around 4.000
billion
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KWh
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kWh
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and
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followed by Russia, Japan, and India with a total
production
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less
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of less
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 than 20
percent
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per cent
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 of China’s
production
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 respectively. The remaining five
countries
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 generated not more than 700
billion
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KWh
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 with
Republic
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the Republic
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 of Korea as the
last
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 country, producing a total
electricity
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less
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of less
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 than 500
billion
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KWh
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. With regard to
the
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consumption, China
also
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 ranked first with
a
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total usage of
electricity
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 of more than 5000
billion
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KWh
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kWh
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. The sequence of ranking of
electricity
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 consumption is the same as the
electricity
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production
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 ranking, except that Germany consumed more
electricity
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 than it produced, making it
to
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have an
electricity
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 deficit of around 50
billion
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Kwh
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.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words electricity, countries, production, billion, kwh with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • electricity production
  • electricity consumption
  • disparity
  • significant
  • top ten countries
  • main features
  • compare
  • relevant
  • geographical concentration
  • trends
  • patterns
  • implications
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