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The charts below show the percentage of people aged 23-65 in different occupations in one UK town (Ashby) and in the UK as a whole in 2008.

The charts below show the percentage of people aged 23-65 in different occupations in one UK town (Ashby) and in the UK as a whole in 2008.
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The pie charts compare the proportion of
people
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 aged 23-65 by various professions in a town
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in
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 the
UK
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 (
Ashby
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) and in the
UK
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 in 2008.
Overall
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, it is evident that almost four-tenths of
people
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 were engaged in official jobs and personal services in
Ashby
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,
whereas
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 most
people
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 preferred to work in office settings, technical sites, and personal services in the
UK
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. As the graph shows, personal services were more popular in
Ashby
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 among other sectors, with 21%, but in the
UK
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, most
people
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 engaged in office work, made up 19%.
In contrast
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, the figures for the construction sector and the unemployed made up 30% in
Ashby
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 and 20% in the whole part of the
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.
On the other hand
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, there was a slight difference of 1% in shop work between
Ashby
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 and the
UK
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. Regarding technical sites, the rates of
people
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 were 9% in
Ashby
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 and 17% in the
UK
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 respectively.
However
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, the figures for professional sectors were 8% in
Ashby
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 and 14% in the
UK
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 respectively.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, uk, ashby with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • occupational distribution
  • employment structure
  • percentages
  • overrepresented
  • underrepresented
  • demographic factors
  • educational background
  • economic implications
  • national average
  • regional variation
  • workforce composition
  • sectoral employment
  • job market dynamics
  • statistical comparison
  • trend analysis
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