Some people feel that manufacturers and supermarkets have the responsibility to reduce the amount of packaging of goods. Others argue that customers should avoid buying goods with a lot of packaging. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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plastics from
packaging
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the packaging
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was
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were
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accused
for
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its
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negative impact on destroying the
environemnt
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environment
, it is widely debated whether the manufacturers and supermarkets should be responsible for reducing the amount of packaging of goods or not, others argue that the clients themselves need to avoid buying
products
with overpackaging
instead
. Both
point
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of
views
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and
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the reason
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reason
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why I agree with the former statement will be
further
discussed in
this
essay.
To begin
with, it may seem sensible for some to believe that the manufacturers play an
esstential
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essential
role in
restriction
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the restriction
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of packages.
This
is possibly because they are the
one
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ones
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who produce and design the package.
For example
, the
entrepeneur
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entrepreneur
can choose how their package to be as it is
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based
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on their design and the durability of its good. Many opponents of
this
idea might
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that might think that another layer of packages is indifferent
with
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and if some groups of people were
disatisfied
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dissatisfied
with the overpackaging should try avoiding it.
Therefore
, there is
an
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evident
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of
an
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environmentalist clients who try ditching plastic packaging and
change
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to
material
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a material
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that can be
reuse
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.
For example
,
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an
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refill shop in
UK
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the UK
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, there is
an
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evident show
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that using
this
reusable container can reduce the extra package of the
products
dramatically
up
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to 60%.
However
, I personally argue in favour of
a practical solutions
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practical solutions
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to tackle
with
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these
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packaging seeing that they have the
authorities
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and manpower to create efficient yet low capital to wrap the
products
well. Some
products
that
likely
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are likely
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to be
broke
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required
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extra care and protection and so does the layer of packaging.
porcelaine
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porcelain
dishes set,
for instance
, these fragile items need extra packaging to protect them from being
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. In summary,
although
it is undeniable that environmental protection by reducing
amount
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of packaging is subjective among some groups of people, I am of the opinion that the manufacturer
act
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as a protagonist
to
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tackling
with
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both environmental and financial aspects to prevent the product from any form of
damages
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damage
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.
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task achievement
Ensure that both viewpoints are explored in equal detail to achieve a balanced discussion. Further elaborate on the pros and cons for both sides with more clarity.
coherence cohesion
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overall
Pay attention to spelling and grammatical accuracy. Ensure sentences are clear and free of errors for better understanding.
coherence cohesion
The essay structure is clear, with an introduction, body, and conclusion.
task achievement
Relevant examples, like the refill shop in the UK, are used to support points.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Sustainability
  • Eco-friendly
  • Carbon footprint
  • Excessive packaging
  • Biodegradable materials
  • Corporate social responsibility
  • Consumer advocacy
  • Environmental stewardship
  • Waste reduction
  • Recycling initiatives
  • Green practices
  • Minimalist lifestyle
  • Resource conservation
  • Sustainable consumption
  • Packaging alternatives
  • Regulatory measures
  • Ethical choices
  • Environmental impact assessment
  • Renewable resources
  • Compostable packaging
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