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The bar chart shows the division of household tasks by gender in Great Britain. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart shows the division of household tasks by gender in Great Britain. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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this
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 report derives from a bar chart which illustrates the total
time
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men
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 and
women
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 spend performing six different chores around the house during the day.
overall
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, the males prefer gardening over any other task and dislike
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performing
 clothes washing more than any other task. Not only is
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 point clear, but
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women
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utilize
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spend
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 the most
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for
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cooking,
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 maintenance is a job they spend the least amount of
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 acting on. Notably,
women
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 more than double the
men
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 in cooking with a
44 minute
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 difference between
sexes
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the sexes
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.
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, observe how
women
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 execute the cleaning for about 45
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 more than
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men
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. Next with gardening, the
men
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 perform
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 for 49.5
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, and the
women
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 conduct
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 activity for less than half that
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. with the care of children,
women
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 far exceed the
men
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 in
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 area by 25
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 each day.
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 point,
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men
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 undertake maintenance almost three times more than
women
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.
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 a final note of comparison, the famels spend 25
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 per day washing clothes,
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men
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 only use 2
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 of
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their
time
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 on
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 duty.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words time, men, women, minutes with synonyms.
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