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the table below shows the number of temporary migrant workers in four countries in 2003 and 2006 and the number of these workers per 1000 people in these countries in 2006. Summarise the information and write 150 words

the table below shows the number of temporary migrant workers in four countries in 2003 and 2006 and the number of these workers per 1000 people in these countries in 2006. Summarise the information and write 150 words
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The table provides key information about the count of temporary migrant labourers in four nations in 2003 and 2006 and the count of these employees per 1000
people
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 in these world regions in 2006.
Overall
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, it can be seen that the
USA
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 witnessed the highest
number
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 of temporary migrant
workers
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, in 2003 and 2006.
In addition
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, New Zealand represented the highest
number
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 of employees per 1000
people
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, in 2006,
whereas
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 the US had the lowest
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.
According to
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 what is shown, New Zealand saw the lowest
number
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 of temporary migrant
workers
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, in 2003, at 65000,
while
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 the
USA
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 had the biggest
number
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, at 577000. The
number
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 of
workers
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 who migrated to Australia was 152000, in 2003, but for the UK was 137000. In terms of 2006, the migration of temporary labourers to the
USA
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 was the highest one, at 678000, which could be considered more than the sum of temporary
workers
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 who migrated to Australia and the UK.
However
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, New Zealand had the lowest
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 of employees, at 87000, it represented the highest
number
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 of
workers
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 per 1000
people
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, at 21.1. The count of
workers
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 per 1000
people
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 was very low for Australia and the
USA
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, at 4.4 and 2.3 respectively.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words people, usa, number, workers with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "represented" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 6 times.
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