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The graph below shows the population change between 1940 and 2000 in three different counties in the U.S. state of Oregon.

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The graph below shows the population change between 1940 and 2000 in three different counties in the U.S. state of Oregon.
The line graph indicates the changes in the
quantity
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number
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 of people
in
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apply
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over a 61-year period

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • population change
  • significant increase/decrease
  • growth rates
  • economic opportunities
  • migration patterns
  • environmental conditions
  • rapid growth/decline
  • industrial development
  • natural disasters
  • governmental policies
  • historical data
  • economic conditions
  • environmental sustainability
  • technological advancements
  • social implications
  • economic implications
  • environmental implications
  • infrastructure demands
  • natural resources
  • community life
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