The bar chart below shows average UK salaries, by city. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows average UK salaries, by city.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart
represent
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the data related to the mean
salary
the
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UK in various cities.
Overall
, there is a fluctuation in the income in given seven cities in Britain. Looking into details, the wealthiest people are living in London which is the most populated town in
UK
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and the average
salary
of individuals is recorded as 33,634 pounds. Even though, Cambridge city has the least number of occupants their income is still in the second position just under 30,000 pounds. It is interesting to note that, the mean
salary
is almost closer in Bristol and Edinburgh
although
they are in different countries.
In addition
, citizens with the least amount of money, which is exactly 25531 pounds, are living in Birmingham in
United
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Kingdom.
Although
,
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the number of people in
the
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Manchester is quite high
as
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4643, their
salary
is very
much
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low being
in
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at
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the 6th of the list
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Vocabulary: Replace the words salary with synonyms.
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