The bar chart below shows average UK salaries, by city. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows average UK salaries, by city.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart
represent
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the data related to the mean
salary
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the
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UK in various cities.
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, there is a fluctuation in the income in given seven cities in Britain. Looking into details, the wealthiest people are living in London which is the most populated town in
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and the average
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of individuals is recorded as 33,634 pounds. Even though, Cambridge city has the least number of occupants their income is still in the second position just under 30,000 pounds. It is interesting to note that, the mean
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is almost closer in Bristol and Edinburgh
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they are in different countries.
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, citizens with the least amount of money, which is exactly 25531 pounds, are living in Birmingham in
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Kingdom.
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,
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the number of people in
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Manchester is quite high
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4643, their
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is very
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low being
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the 6th of the list
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "although".
Vocabulary: Replace the words salary with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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