The charts below show the percentages of men and women aged 60-64 in employment in four countries in 1970 and 2000 Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

The charts below show the percentages of men and women aged 60-64 in employment in four countries in 1970 and 2000

Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

You should write at least 150 words.
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The bar graphs illustrate the proportion of both genders who are aged 60-64 in employment in
Belgium
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, the USA,
Japan
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and
Australia
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between two years, 1970 and 2000.
Overall
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it is clear that
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men are getting employed more than women when their ages are around 60-64.
Moreover
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, The fraction of employment in
Japan
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is the highest.
To begin
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with, in 1970, The male old generations in
Japan
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occupied 85% followed by America which was at 55%. Australian male elderly registered 47% and only
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19% was shown in
Belgium
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.
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, after 30 years, The percentage of Japanese men aged 60-64 went down by approximately 10%
while
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the US fell to 55%.
The
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dramatic decrease
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older adults was seen in both
Australia
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and
Belgium
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to 47% and 19% respectively.
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, the ratio of Japanese female seniors in 1970 was at 43% and the US was about 36%.
Australia
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started at 16% and
Belgium
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was at 8%. The portion of the United States and
Australia
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minimally rose by 2-3%
however
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, The unnoticeable drop was seen in
Japan
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and
Belgium
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to 40% and 7%.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
Vocabulary: Replace the words belgium, japan, australia with synonyms.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Employment rate
  • Percentage
  • Significant increase/decrease
  • Fluctuation
  • Gender disparity
  • Trend
  • Decline
  • Improvement
  • Variation
  • Noteworthy
  • Aligned
  • Comparative analysis
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