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The diagram below shows how coffee beans are processed. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main featuresl and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows how coffee beans are processed. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main featuresl and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagram illustrates the
process
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 of making coffee. The
process
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 is expressed in several steps It all starts with the harvest. Afterwards, the collected seeds are ground in a pulper.
The next step is
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a
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fermentation in fermenting tanks,
usually
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 it lasts from 1 to 3 days.
Then
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 these
beans
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 are dried.
Next
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 these fried
beans
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 undergo a sorting
process
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.Sorted
beans
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 are roasted in a special machine.
The next step is
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 the
process
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 of grinding the roasted
beans
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.
Finally
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,
beans
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 are ready for making coffee drink. The
last
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 step is transporting
beans
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 to the grocery store, where
consumer
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consumers
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 can buy
it
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them
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 and make coffee.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "the next step is".
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words process, beans with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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