The diagram below shows how coffee beans are processed. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main featuresl and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagram illustrates the
process
of making coffee. The process
is expressed in several steps
It all starts with the harvest. Afterwards, the collected seeds are ground in a pulper. The next step is
a
fermentation in fermenting tanks, Remove the article
apply
usually
it lasts from 1 to 3 days. Add a comma
usually,
Then
these beans
are dried. Next
these fried Add a comma
Next,
beans
undergo a sorting process
.Sorted beans
are roasted in a special machine. The next step is
the process
of grinding the roasted beans
. Finally
, beans
are ready for making coffee drink. The last
step is transporting beans
to the grocery store, where consumer
can buy Fix the agreement mistake
consumers
it
and make coffee.Correct pronoun usage
them
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