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The map shows the development of the village of Rye mouth between 1995 and present. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The map shows the development of the village of Rye mouth between 1995 and present. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
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This
 map compares the differences
of
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in
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 the village of Rye
mouth
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Mouth
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 which have happened since 1995.
Overall
, there are some noticeable major and minor changes
such
 as housing,
reconstruting
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reconstructing
 and
destorying
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destroying
activites
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activities
 that have taken place in different areas of
map
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the map
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. In 1995, in
Eastern
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the Eastern
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 region of
village
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the village
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, there were two large areas that used to be
as
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farmland and
forrest
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forest
 park that
have
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changed
to
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into
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golf
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a golf
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field
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fields
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 and tennis courts together and
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the forrest
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forrest
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forest
 park was removed.In
Western
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the Western
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 area, houses have increased from 12 in 1995 to 16 at present.
Besides
, a road was reconstructed in
Western
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the Western
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 area. In
south
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the south
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 of the map, they built
car
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a car
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 park near
right
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the right
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 side of the hotel
that
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apply
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people use
this
 facility.In 1995, shops and fish markets
have
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changed into restaurants and apartments relatively and
also
 the fishing port was demolished
which
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and
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 people
spend
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spent
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 their time in
this
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the
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 area.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • development
  • transformation
  • residential areas
  • infrastructure
  • connectivity
  • commercial development
  • public services
  • green spaces
  • recreational areas
  • economic growth
  • lifestyle changes
  • quality of life
  • sustainability
  • layout
  • connectivity
  • impact
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